Interesting beginning. I don’t know why, but it seems like the start to a horror piece.

Built up a sense of suspense around this poor guy who is so out of place, but obviously there for a reason.
If this was intended to be a continuing story it will be quite interesting I think.

Cool scene, and definitely brimming with questions and potential.

A few missteps along the way. Second paragraph has present and past tense; I know how you meant it, but I don’t think it worked. You used ‘mind numbingly’ twice, and the first one probably doesn’t need the ‘ly’.

Very cool scene, and the feel definitely comes across well.

Thanks very much, THX. Perhaps “mind numbed” is an accurate adjective for myself.
I corrected the redundancies and the tense contradictions.
Perhaps I should refrain from writing into the AM hours anymore…