Missing a comma between ‘sun’ and ‘wind’ in that second there line.
This is a really good take on the challenge. Pure speech, and not only that but someone is telling someone else about the character. That gives the reader the rare insight of what others genuinely think about them. And it’s good things.
The quirky story about the wisdom teeth, the compelling introduction (first paragraph is wonderful). You had me knowing the character even before you told me his name!
It’s sad too – like a eulogy. Someone who’s known someone for a long time and has lost them, feeling the need to tell the world what a great, weird, amazing person they were.
Thanks for entering. Much appreciated. Sorry for the lateness of me comment.
Abby (LoA)