Where do you want to take this? You mention growing up and man in the same breath.
Man is subjective, it’s almost an insult now, fast food commercials screaming at the male population Maybe you’re not man enough to finish our meals and crap like that. I’m gay, and still have issues with feeling, looking and acting Manly.
So what is your breaking point? Wearing Secret deodorant or murder?
I despise the phrase Man Up! So your story is about being a certain kind of man or a young boys trials and tribulations? I guess that’s the point I’m trying to make, your few lines have a back-flash theme/genre to them, that’s a difficult writing task.
I hadn’t really thought about the first line in depth before. But now that you mention it, it’s interesting that I said he was a man who’s still growing up.
I’ve been dying to do a “coming-of-age” story for the longest time now. In the story I want to define what a man is. And how one guy’s misconception of the idea of a “man” drove him to do the unforgivable.
And I agree with you. I do also hate the phrase man up.
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