So will he leave the phone somewhere, or try to find out more about the app or the original owner? Hm.

I thought this was a interesting read, but the ending was a bit of a let down. We knew Mark had a phone that was going to burn someone, but the ending was rushed and a bit of a let down. Kind of like the first time I had sex (1 hour of groping and foreplay, that lead up to 3 pumps then done. wham, bam, thanks, could you hand me that towel over there)

Also, I’m not fond of a story’s narrator voice using the “Some” words. Their ok in dialog, but the god-like narrator should avoid “somewhere” , “somehow” , “something”. In a way it feels like the author is being lazy. “I know I should explore or explain this, but it’ll sidetrack the story” the car having no time to react to a man who ran into the street needs no explaination.

I like it. The ending was probably a bit rushed but it’s alright if you write more. :D