Reading this is a chore. I get what you’re doing and I think the monologue is good. I need some descriptions in between, or someone else to speak maybe (dialogue). James’ southern train of thought exhausted me, though, I do declare (haha), the ending is heartfelt and you deliver his twang exceptionally well in the last paragraph. I don’t want to rate this. It’s not perfect but it easily could be given more than 1024 characters. I feel like whatever it lacks is largely due to the character constraint.

Yes, I probably broke a law in the number of apostrophes I used.

But I think your assessment is on point. I have mixed feelings about this piece.
I was angling for a transcription of an interview, so it’s a narrative not meant to be experienced through the medium of writing. It just so happened that I did write it, making it a weird, disjunctive thing. Hmm…
An opportunity to learn, I suppose.