Ooh neat! I hope my (future) daughter is cool enough to be an assassin. In a movie, Tasha would help the old man and thus become a target for (antagonist). Then the man would teach her, train her, and then die for her. In the final scene it would be daughter against (Tasha as a daughter). Or maybe they join forces against (Evil Organization. . . of Ninjas ((Maybe)). Then there is that curious line about him being too young to be a father. Immortal? Is his daughter a child-assassin?

My mind does THAT all the time.

Anyway great job using just a single snapshop and bringing it to life.

Thanks for going on with the plot. Now I want to write a whole book on this. Hehehehe! Glad you liked it, anyway.

Cool idea!

The first sentence is presented a bit off. “…dancing to the music ppouring out of her earbuds” … music would be “pouring past her earbuds” if she’s listening to music. The way it’s presented suggests the music is coming from her earbuds and out her ears. :)

3rd sentence: You have an extra “was” in there. “… was appeared to be a man.” (Also, consider ending the phrase as a sentence to avoid a run on sentence here).

You creating a nice red harring with your dialogue about the daughter/assassin detail. I missed that they were the same people a few days ago until I read Quick’s comment. My bad :).

Right now the sentence also suggests that the man expects Tasha to actually know his daughter. Might be clearer to just use: “Hello, sweetie. Have you seen my daughter and assassin?”

Also, Quick’s plot build is pretty cool too!