Weird meter, but it works somehow. It’s like each couplet is a single line (or it wouldn’t work because the first time I read it the seventh line of each stanza freaked me right out.) That said the last verse is so so odd, and the last line is so weird – abiding love?

Meter aside, the imagery is gorgeous. Dreams coming reality. Only thing is that reality is never quite so perfect as fantasy.

I played with the last lines in each verse, and while it feels off step, I like returning to the original rhyme with the final line.

This was written with The Holly and the Ivy running through my head.

Beautiful sentiment- I didn’t seem to mind the odd meter as the tone seemed to keep it I. Check- for me atleast