Not happy with the flow of the story. The last paragraph is too crammed together. I’m going to have to revise this at some point. In the meantime, at least it’s been published.

yeah, but this is a great historical figure to write about. :)

First let me say I admire you for even attempting to write a piece of historical fiction each day. The research can be maddening, I’m sure. Although I haven’t commented on each of them I have read them all; and I feel that your stories are far above par. This one though, as you yourself stated, seems ‘crammed’. Perhaps that’s fitting; considering the subject? ;) (Sorry was that in poor taste? I apologize.) Anyway, August – it’s nice to know you’re human and thus a handy example to follow.

I agree with Senior Bic sentiments. This time when I saw the date and the name Anne, I had an inkling of what would follow. Then I checked the tags to confirm my suspicions. I think one of the hardest parts that you’ve done so far is that each story as far as I can tell is a “slice of life” story. Problems may arise but everything fits just so. Congratulations and know that despite faulty internet connections, we are out here.