“…down to the floor of the lake’s floor…” I’m not a fan of repeating the word floor here. However, I do like how it naturally flows like prose into rhyming with ‘shore’. Id prefer simply “…down to the lake’s floor…” if you were to edit.
Anyway—this is wonderful and poetic. Chalk full of all the best language devices! Thanks for entering :)
Tad Winslow