First person/present, usually bugs me but it works surprisingly well here. Does this encapsulating what we call the walk of shame? (The walk home after a one night stand rather than the first time lesbian encounter- I heart lesbians). Aesthetically, I noticed that the last three paragraphs all start with ‘I’. I’m not saying it is good or bad, just that it is noticable

I am a huge fan of repeating words, it often makes me feel like I am listening to drum beats. This happens in your story and I love that. I can feel each beat along with her thoughts. There are a few times where you switch from present to past tense, was this done on purpose?

the switching of tense was just a mistake, sorry. thanks for the feedback it means alot :)

Very poetic from the start. And now I have ‘I kissed a girl’ stuck in my head.