Funky Chunky

Welcome to Ficly :)

I think this is a good first attempt (much better than mine!)

I really love the ‘untimely frost’ simile.

I do, however, personally feel that the poem tails off a bit from that awesome beginning. E.g. I feel an extra syllable would really help the third stanza:

‘What was once an army of men lies strewn amongst the Flowers’.

Let me know what you think.

• Posted over 7 years ago.
• 4 out of 5