So fluid and mesmerising. I think you should win an award for the most poetic tag ever.

Somehow, for me, the last two lines threw it off a little. Were they forced for the rhyme?

Thanks for the critique. I agree now that you mention it. I think those lines would serve an entirely different poem, with a different rhythm, far better. Forced is the correct word. Consider them gone.

Now it definitely has more symmetry. Better =)

You had me at “An infertile/Nocturnal eye”!

When I first read the poem, I didn’t see the tags and assumed that the light was being cast by the first explosion that signaled the atomic holocaust.

But the moon works too!