I am growing to love stories that show how amazing the natural world is, and this seems to be one such story.

Ooo, nice set-up of the seedy and deranged slum. You connect the scene in unlikely ways. Everything about this is layered and deeper than it appears. You have a nice balance of telling us and letting us use our imagination. There are plenty of teaser elements compelling enough for me to want to continue reading. The Toeless killer being one of them.

Great work!

It tells enough to keep me interested and tells so little it drives me crazy: I want to read more!

P.S. Have you ever tried active voice on pieces like this?

I love this! Such an opening.

One small thing…in your second paragraph, there’s some tense issues…some past, some present. I don’t know if it’s intentional or not, but I find that it throws me out.

Purposefully changed all the tenses of the second paragraph to the present tense.