I like what you’ve done here, Robert. It’s larger in scope that what I imagined might be the case but that’s okay too. It’s part of the experience of not being in full control of the direction that the story takes.

Two very minor corrections are needed: “one part of a the whole” and “consumed in in a greater vastness”.

Fixed. You responded so quickly I was afraid that I had made huge mistake. Maybe that was appropriate given the circumstances.

I like this very much! I’m looking forward to spending some time figuring out what the heck I’m supposed to do next. :D