ripped this from my tumblr, seeking feedback

written in response to a challenge to write a poem from the last line to the first, i.e. upside-down. Cheated a bit by making a poem that’s readable both ways, i.e. normally or, as the challenge said, upside-down. gimmicky but I had fun writing it.

Very sad and also feels very real. I think I know the feeling, which tells me you conveyed the feeling well along with the scene.

really good control of form. Nice use of tense as well, really brought out melancholic feeling

Beautifully done but quite sad.

thank you all for your positive feedback.