And the plot thickens!

It seemed a bit clunky but still very good! :D

This almost reminds me of the Truman Show. XD

Ya well here at work and trying to look like I’m working….lol…

Bahahahahaha!

I like how the plot is shaping..
But ya.. a little clunky in the Center Tony…

“d before the assassin could finish the job they ran off.” — who’s they?

“he was there to help her…her picked her up and carried her to the waiting van ..” The HER HER twice… could use a brief edit.

I believe that’s what Princess saw too.. but love where this is going…

Ok I edited…not sure if I made it better or worse…lol

Better. :)

This is stumping me big time as to the next sequel… “she could be the next one”

No idea what to do with that. LOL!

The problem is now that you have a shooter and an assassin..“Suddenly there was a squeal of tires and before the assassin could finish the job the shooter ran off.”
also, that van should roll from ‘side to side’.. but I’ll stop here.
Now you’ve introduced a new character, a possible pairing/partnering of the ‘patient zero’ as alro made him, and this new vixen. :) I like!

All fixed ElshaHawk…lol

Good edits there!

I’m thinking it’s pretty safe to assume that this is the same woman who touched John earlier.

You got one Princess…if not I do….

Looks like we published two different sequels at the same time. I can delete mine if you like.

Or keep both and go down two different timelines….

Sorry for that. :/

No Princess its ok they both work together or seperatly….lol…

So – which thread to we stay on.. Princess’? or Anthonious’?

Matters not to me….

You could do both if you like….they could be different times of the same timeline…princess’s happening before mine…thoughts?

It’s eitger Al or me writing the next installment…. Or someone new. :) I’m assuming Thoughts & Intentions and Paula installments were going while John was either sedated, blacked out, in surgery, in a cima, asleep, at a “hospital”, etc.

Sure have at er folks…I’ll work on something else…