I like this alot. Its a fantastic hook and there’s a sensuality I enjoy, just hinted at.
I’d love to write a sequel (I’m new here, am I supposed to ask permission?)

-claire

You totally don’t have to ask permission — please, go ahead! This is part of a much larger piece I’ve been playing with, which was born of a shorter piece I did with my teeny, tiny writing circle. Would love to see how/where someone takes it from here!

Done and done :)
(1024 characters doesn’t quite seem to suit my style, though…going to have to work on that, I think, try and adapt or else I’ll end up just annoyed LOL)

Love your sequel… I think we could have some fun with this! I’m playing with the idea of writing either a prequel to mine or sequel to yours.

I hope so
I think a kind of back-and-forth works well here (I’m guessing).
I’d love to see how the image evolves with you, backwards or forwards

(“I hope so” = “I hope you’ll write a sequel or prequel”)

oh noes! I is not readings the prequel!
Is not ready!
TEASE!
(have I mentioned I have a serious inability to be patient?)

I started writing it but got distracted by The Hills… which is just wrong, and yet I’m obsessed. I don’t watch tv, except for The Hills. I should be taken out back and shot.

Really? The Hills is the one thing you watch? OK, now you are just scaring me.
Then again, I can’t pull myself away from a Reality TV marathon…of ANYTHING…

thats my personal shame.

It’s sickening… I’ve been into it since day one. Considering that I consider myself smarter than the average bear, this confuses the hell out of me. But it’s so damn addictive. Prequel up… had a little trouble with it… might need some editing later on.

I like the prequel, but the tone was a bit off, compared to this ‘chapter’. Not that it was bad, but there’s a cleverness of image and word here that isn’t present in the prequel.
A sort of immediacy.

I agree completely…

Oh my. I really love that description.

Thanks, dkscully!