It’s a lovely idea and a sort of flow or feeling or imagery to it. Then some of the words seem really out of place, or the grammar is just odd. So, I like the sentiment but really struggled with the technical aspects of the writing.
Thank you! I am Brazilian, so I have some difficulty with the adequacy of English words. What do you think I could change to improve the structure of the text? Your suggestion would certainly be very helpful! :)
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