Pretty nicely described poem that was interesting to read, but there were a few areas where the syllables crowd up the meter and the rhyme is a little forced. Also, the word fire is a little distracting when used so close together in the first 2 stanzas.
I agree with this Stovohobo. I knew when I was typing theword fire. My mind overruled though. I should (and will try to proof before publishing.) Thank you for the feedback. Marli
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