I don’t actually like this one, but I was really taken with the idea. I would really love criticism on how I could change it, so any constructive crit is welcome! (:
“There is a lull in the distance between, in the toy cars (are welcoming miniatures)” this line sounds a bit off? the second line, actually. I don’t know, it’s just me.
“There is a lull in the distance between, in the toy cars (are welcoming miniatures)”
this line sounds a bit off? the second line, actually. I don’t know, it’s just me.