mmm nice image of a chessboard! Although the constant references to the image can get a little unnecessary after a while… love the part about monochrome queens :) oh and is this the first of a series of name poems? hopeful :D

This is so bitter and poignant and just very bitter even for me. I particularly agree with that last stanza.

@petite

it is, actually. The poems are mostly based on what the names mean. Leia, if I’m not mistaken means ‘weary’.

@brazen

It’s a bit saddening, and sometimes a bit annoying, but sometimes, just sweeping everything away is the best solution… although I really wonder about it sometimes.

Actually I think the chess image is a very good centralizer. It’s an extended metaphor that works well and is used in a way that doesn’t get stale, so I wouldn’t worry about it getting wearisome (besides, even if it did, that would be an excellent case of form following theme). Good rhythm especially; it almost gets Shakespearean with the “made of tears, made of tears.”

thank you very much! Will try harder to produce even better pieces.

Another great piece to add to the tidal wave of awesome poetry that’s flooding ficly at the moment. I look forward to more! Never knew what ‘Leia’ means – will be watching Star Wars in a whole new light! =)

Really does put Star Wars in a new light when you realise the princess’s life is so…..weary.