It could use a little punctuation. Other than that it’s a great poem. Lots of themes and continuing metaphors. I loved these lines: “You’ll break your neck to watch your back You’ll lose count of the lies Once the line is cast” Good read. I enjoyed it.
It could use a little punctuation. Other than that it’s a great poem. Lots of themes and continuing metaphors. I loved these lines: “You’ll break your neck to watch your back You’ll lose count of the lies Once the line is cast”
Good read. I enjoyed it.
Last four lines….. AMAZING
Abby (LoA) 
Princess Binky Lemontwist (LoA)