I think I like this…
I’m unsure – your use of parenthesis had me befuddled as to who was thinking what.
Maybe using italics in one place, or even brackets, to differentiate between the sources of information

what’s up, foo’

cackles evilly

@blossom roquen
changed the first set of parentheses into quotation marks, if it makes it clearer.

@brazen
sup