It’s not vague, it’s subtle!

….aaand I ran out of characters. :P

Awww…. this story is so cute!! I think the short sentences really add to the mood of the piece. Excellent job setting up the last line. :D

Wonderful first line, and as usual, very evident personal style throughout. I feel like I could identify your poems’ author without seeing it beforehand.

Haha! That story felt like it took a little while to get to the point, but the ending was very satisfying – and cute, too. Very nicely done!

This I found very comical and strangely adorable. Good work! The seven hours earlier part has me scratching my head a little but that’s alright. XD

I’ve had days like this. I like the conclusion, too. Light hearted presentation and and a warm finish. Like it.

I like that you used ;@#*! instead of actual cuss words, I think it made it more powerful that way. I can see the sleepy punk rocker associate begrudging opening the door, it is a strong image in my mind.

Wow I’m slow today. It actually took me some time to work out. Oh dear. Very cute little tale. I think we’ve all had days like those – when everything’s against you, but it’s worth it for the character in the end.

I enjoyed the use of time. It isn’t often that you see a story in this kind of format.

“Chain my cold bike to the cold bike rack with a cold chain in this cold weather.” This line made me smile – the bitterness against the cold is great and the repetition really works.

A great, feel-good piece! I love it =) Another ‘thank you very much’ for this one!

Nice piece! This format is a challenge because lists are inherently boring to read. If you’re not careful, you can lose your readers long before the end because their eyes tend to glaze over with the repetitive timestamps. You managed to keep every one interesting and engaging, making the payoff at the end that much more enjoyable.

I definitely shared this with my friends. Absolutely adorable. It took me a second to work out the ending…but I’m on “midnight-feeding-mama” brain these days, so that was probably my fault. ;) This store was positively endearing.

I totally know this feeling. To an extent, anyways.

Bloody alarm clocks!

Took me a while to get, but very cute and sweet once I did.

This was very sweet. Like the grumble about the cold, know how that feels!

Ha! This was funny. Jim’s right in that lists can be a challenge, but you bested that by starting with a joke and drawing the reader in. The ending is clear. The speaker is trying to impress the popular girl (b!;(#) at school by doing their home/coursework. There were some really funny lines and I think you are a testament to your craft.

I had more of the impression that the characters were college students and housemates, and that he likes her but is friend-zoned. The girl needs to figure out what she has and hold on to him before its too late. I took the final dialog as the girl saying it rather than the narrator.

Very nice. I like the format.

There is a fair amount of detail to the character that comes across considering it just a list of events. That’s pretty impressive.

Absolutely loved this. I wondered why he went to all that trouble just for coffee, until 8:12 am. Then it all made sense.