Very nice, very clear scene. Now I’m curious to know what was going on too.

Oh! Creepy observer?

I like the mystery and the vagueness about it, especially since the narrator is just passing by. It seems to say something to me about the multitude of lives and experience that exist in the world outside of or just on the edge of our awareness.

Minor point: second sentence feels like a run-on. Maybe just break up with a semi colon for that last bit instead of a comma?

Loved the line about not living in it if you were a fish. Really communicates a bit of disdain for the scene in a subtle way.

thanks, I don’t always get along with semi-colons..

Never thought about the fish thing.. now I’m reading too much into this..

I really like this. One of those brief moments where you can’t help but speculate about the lives and stories of people that intersect with your own life.

I’m a fan of the “If I were a fish, I’d not live in it” line, too. I like the phrasing. And the narrator’s other choice of wording communicates a lot about his/her character.

You just totally backed up my psychosis.. now i really want some chocolate..