I loved this! Battle plans, get-away balloons, speeding trains and yet it smacks of a reinassance (if that’s how you spell it) revolution of some kind! Nice job overall in my opinion. :)

loved it. Really. Stanza II and IV Especially

Nice! The stanza layout gives it a bit of an epic poem (a la Beowulf) feel.

This feels like a summary of an epic poem. It feels crammed in. If you expanded this, the character and scenes and action would flow out into something book length. :)

I did actually :> here’s the original version that I shortened so I could submit it as one piece for the challenge submission: http://ficly.com/stories/32717