Connected to….

http://ficly.com/stories/32468

Very nice! I love your style of writing. It flows nicely and it’s easy to follow, while still being interesting and intriguing. I would love to know what happens next in the story.

You built up quite a backstory in this piece. I noticed that she hasn’t yet leaned her lesson about who doesn’t care to please whom. :)

Aha! So that’s what Delliria is trying to do. Excellent addition.