I’m confused. Who’s the woman in this piece? The Baronet and the servant are both described using masculine pronouns, so I can only assume that the woman is Jolee. If so, then the last sentence of the sixth paragraph is very confusing.
I am intrigued by this ‘little’ world you’re developing, though.
The woman was the servant in the Coalition. Hm. I’m not sure how that might be clarified while keeping to the character count. Maybe I’ll revise this later.
Jim Stitzel
Alexander Tairov