Totally lost.

I understand your goal, but a larger dose of cohesion would do this endeavor a world of good.

This one was harder. The titles were really difficult to link, and I really regret committing to it.

I get the overall sense of the piece, but it definitely feels disjointed and incoherent — but maybe that’s what you were going for.

I had to read it a couple of times before understanding a bit of it…The snap I’m not sure of and I don’t get the engineer thing at all or how the dark fingers on her neck link… I don’t know if that was the objective or not but I think it’d be really good if I actually understood quite where it was going :)

Not convinced that this one works as well as the previous one. I guess you were limited by the source material.

Hmmm… it doesn’t make a whole lot of sense, but I think that just makes it more chaotic, which also works. :)

I am…really confused. Heh. I tried to understand this, I did. Maybe I was just too tired to follow it.

wha…?

I applaud your effort H.S. Wift! I don’t think it’s true but it feels like the authors were intentionally blocking you. My favorite part is the repeat at the end. There’s always something about stories that have loops that I find interesting.

GOD YES!

MOAR.

Shawn! You jerk! Don’t be callin’ chicks up in the wee hours of the morning! You naughty naughty boy! What would Doe say?

This was AWESOME. :D Please do another!

I choose to take it a sentence at a time, and that’s a nice way to read an interpretaton of each title one by one. As a whole, it’s of course disjointed. Worth the effort, though, for “ursine semen,” if nothing else.

Good effort. This must have been really tough.

I’m so glad that you made another of these. Of course it was going to be hard to follow the insane genius of your first piece but it still works. And I think the latest titles were harder to link together than the original lot so it’s the other writer’s fault, not yours. lol.

Honestly, I’m super impressed that you could get any kind of coherent story out of it at all. Good on you!