I love that closing visual.

I agree. I would even say that the last stanza was what stood out the most for me in this piece.

thank you :) Is there anyway I can make it seem more elegant though? It seems quite… clumsy to me.

i liked the start with the typography of your name, felt like you could’ve traced the A-d-a, like it starts high (A), loops low then up (d), and then ends in a kinda cutsey little middle ground (a) – but none of this is very related to ‘are you okay ada’

anyway it started off very pretty and elegant with the arial A and high ceilings and then dropped into a macabre mess which i guess was your point. I think it’s just too many disconnected/tenuously connected images?

Haha yes the first bit did occur to me but i’ve never been able to do things like that elegantly XD so i decided not… and mmm is this better? the initial effect of prettiness and elegance is lost i think… So there’s no longer such a huge contrast…