I don’t know if it is part of the story but “See felt” doesn’t really make much sense to me.

actually the middle of the first sentence “so what standards off oddness to apply is hard to know” is very awkward. I think you’re trying to say, “but it hard to judge what is the norm when you are in love” or something like that. Also that first sentence is long.
The second is a fragment.
You begin the rest of the description with ‘the" and while that has some rhythm, it reads poetically more than prose. Maybe you could format this into a poem.
Finally you have no conclusion, no closing sentence. "I’ll never forget my first real crush." or something like that.
Otherwise, Wow! Incredible descriptions of a very intense, sensual moment. This borders on a mature rating. It’s hawt.

Bah, ‘she felt’, not ‘see felt’. My usual proofreader is on vacation. ;)

And yeah, that one sentence is awkward. Next time I’ll drink my coffee before ficlying.

Okay, corrected a couple typos and tweaked the awkward sentence a bit. Thank you for your comments!

And I meant to think you for the compliment, ElshaHawk. :-)

I really enjoyed this story. It…was beautiful. :) Well done! Thank you!