I found this part awkward: “you were dress in a short blue sleeve shirt”
Do you mean, “dressed in a blue, short-sleeved shirt”?
This is also awkward: “until you noticed what good it was doing”
was it really doing good? then say “until you noticed it wasn’t doing any good.”
It’s quite a jump from popcorn and holding hands to making love, but I guess that’s what midnight does! I’m glad you are still together. :)

I figured I may have left things unclear, and more or less left things to be uncorrected. I guess I was more or less jotting down ideals then actually paying attention to what I was writing. I could always fix it, but am to lazy for such things.

Free-Writing… I’m cool with that. Despite the things Elsh brought out, it was still an adorable story.. =]
Thanks for participating!