Wow. Awesome. Very well-written, and I absolutely loved a lot of these lines. Fantastic job!

Is it weird I want to hug this pen? I like the middle stanza, the hope it has.

You punctuation confuses me a little, since you use 3 commas but nothing else. I don’t think it would take away from the piece if you used more, possibly give it more of a rhythm to show where and what the breaks are?

Alright, edited.

Last line is really nice. Brings that bit of heightened meaning a lot of “ok” poems lack.

Thank you!

Wow. Very darkly beautiful. I really enjoyed this piece.

Thank you.