I’m digging all of it…..I knew you had it in you since we were kids. You were the brains of all our childhood operations. I’m proud to be a part of your stories in life and on paper. Love you brother keep em coming.

When I commented on aisle 6 I didn’t realize this was a series. Reading all of them I now get a better flow of what you are trying to achieve. I like the thought process of the main character. It is hard to clearly form thoughts into a written form that also mesh with the story line. My only suggestions would be to think about what tense you are in. Moving from present to past tense can be very tricky, but I think you have done a good job here. Remember that, and just keep writing. I would like to read more from this.