I threw together some real events, unreal names, and the emotion of the articles I’m reading for my homework. Enjoy!

This was through the eyes of an actual little girl I think. If so, it’s that much more powerful. If not, then I got that feeling anyway so great job. I noticed you left out some words in your sentences. Is that you trying to make this more real? Maybe I’m losing it but I thought I picked up on it lol. Was a really sad and amazing piece though.

I did base this on a girl in my class, but it’s not quite exactly her. I used short, clipped sentences to imply that she was immature for her age, but not completely ‘stupid’ as kids would say about her.

Your implications come through loud and clear for me. I feel it reads exactly how a little girl would talk. Great job capturing the voice and the piece in general.