Sweet… unless that person is stalking the other. Then it’s a little creepy.

Good flow, though.

Lovely. The rhythm is challenging but effective, mostly on account of where you put the line breaks. I didn’t get a creepy feel, but I can see that in the secret nature of the love.

The initial formulation of the poem helped me maintain the pattern, but I think reformatting made it easier on the eyes and smoother to read.