My oh my! That took a turn for the worst!!
I thought this was going to be some sort of sappy kind of love story but definitely turned dark. I like how you kind of eased into the whole concept of a relationship taking a downward spiral.
Really nice!
thanks for writing!

A moment while I puke my shocked brains out….

Ahem, that was a scary poem.

Ooh, creepy. I love it.
One thing I do have to say, is that the rest of the story is vague and suggestive, so the introduction of the world “corpse” kind of devalues the poem, IMO. Like, you should keep it vague and suggestive rather than just saying it. Showing rather than telling, as they say in my course.

In the wise words of Mr. Ferrell:
“Well, that escalated quickly”