Not sure about this one. The concept is solid, but the writing seemed a little forced at times. It could be a lot better.

This is an interesting one. Re-reads commencing.

Nice twist. Staccato but still poetic and easy to picture, especially the ending as the triumphant nerd (who apparently knows jiu jitsu) walks away triumphantly.

Interesting! This is small but I think you mean “Insert expletives here” not “Insert expletives her”?

Typoes be damned unto Oblivion!

THX says it best – the staccato pace lends itself well to this subject matter, as if it’s a recollection from an imperfect memory.