couldn’t choose one, so take all of it

This is so twisted it works. Bravo.

love the first stanza especially, not so hot about the last line :c but that’s about it really rather liked the rest

@ Jack
Thanks!

@pyrrhicv
I don’t know? The last line felt ok when I wrote it. What if I removed it altogether? Would that work?

naw you should leave it as it is haha i’m the only one with a problem with it

on retrospect it does sound weird if you repeat it a bit

i mean, i’m imagining myself reading the poem

i’ll think of something