Nice scenario and gives in its brevity the feeling of pursuit. Hate to be a grammar nazi, but for a minute there I thought the narrator was a time lord. Should be “…heart’s beating fast…” and, “…someone’s coming…”
Nice scenario and gives in its brevity the feeling of pursuit.
Hate to be a grammar nazi, but for a minute there I thought the narrator was a time lord. Should be “…heart’s beating fast…” and, “…someone’s coming…”
I feel the panic you strive for . A bit brief, you could have drawn it out just a wee bit more but I like the emotion.
@THX 0477 im bad at grammer and my grammer cheack never works… Thanks for the imput! @JACK thanks! I did not know what else to say and i was hoping someone would make a sequel (^w^);;
@THX 0477 im bad at grammer and my grammer cheack never works… Thanks for the imput!
@JACK thanks! I did not know what else to say and i was hoping someone would make a sequel (^w^);;
THX 0477 
JACK 
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