I really enjoyed how you set the scene. I was with you all through his realization that something was wrong, but the ending seemed a bit forced. I also wasn’t sure if he was singing again or, if not, why you brought back the italics.

Did a bit of an edit, though I’m not sure if it helped.

As with remembrancer, I loved the scene with its two characters, but I would have liked to see a bit of resolution at the end. Don’t leave a man hanging!