A well paced ( pun intended) dialogue.
I like the way you wrote in descending
Script it gives the failing sense of no control.

I think you mean a tongue I cannot feel in that first paragraph.
This whole experience sounds sooooo uncomfortable. I think you captured that line “in between” really well. I especially liked drags me down in the end, crams me into a space infinitely too small for existence .

I often feel like this as I wake up from dreams more fantastic than my life and it always feels like I am being ripped away from something special. I can’t imagine what being ripped away from death feels like. Very good job.

No problem.

I loved the way you chose to take the challenge. I never really thought about it that way. It’s bizarre really- how reentering reality is more dreamlike than dreams themselves. And sometimes, you just don’t want to wake up from your peaceful dreams..

Really like this. Captured the disorientation very well as well as the disappointment of having to reenter reality once again. My impression was of a failed suicide attempt which made it all the sadder in this reader’s eyes.

wow. very well imagined. I found myself asking: how does he know what this feels like?!

Very powerful, although I would drop the last paragraph – I think it’s anti-climactic.