Holy Hell, that was fun

Good job with the confines of the challenge and beautiful set up.

Congratulations

ouch that’s one painful loop there.. and apparently many Ed’s.. great monologue!

Very good idea with the answering machine. It reads like a good script—just actions and dialogue (monologue, I guess). Really, really interesting possibilites…

The only downside I can think of is the lack of paragraph separation. It doesn’t read as easily as it could. Besides that, it’s great.

Great idea and very well narrated. Makes you wonder what happened to the future Ed.

Pretty good. I like it. The only part I don’t get it ‘His joke-legal is downstairs’. What does that mean?

Anyway, the premise is really enticing, and makes you suspect a twist ending, but in a good way, letting you lower your guard.

Jape S. Prophet

The man from legal said he came from “downstairs” – also known as DownBelow, the Karmic Basement, the Seventh Circle, or Hell. (And it’s another joke that in Ed’s building, legal is downstairs from his office. AND that Mr. Liar Incarnate pretended to be a lawyer. It’s the joke like a burrito – lots of different flavors.)

Awww. I didn’t read your story first!! I thought I was all clever with the voicemail idea. And your story was good to make matters worse!

Whoa. I’m stunned. Professional-level writing! Well done!

Was Ed Gruberman a name from something else? It sounds familiar… Aha! I just googled it. Boot to the head!

Sometimes I grab random names that resonate with funny memories. :)

Scary enough up until the last little twist, which really got me. I didn’t realise until I looked back at the start of the story that Ed never actually got this message…very good and very creepy.

this was just twisted and sick and i love any story staring “you know who”

BRAVO

Very cool, compelling bit of dialogue. High-concept. I reckon there’s an interesting starting point for a movie script in there.