Hurm. Unexpected twist at the end. If this is based on a memory and you were confused at the time, you did an excellent job transmitting that confusion. Since this was (probably) based on a memory, the only problems I had with it disappear. Very good writing across the board. This could be the beginning to almost any kind of story- and I’ll bet it was.

I see what you did there. ‘Sappy…" But in all seriousness, I agree with Robert in the way of the good writing here. With a proper use of the word ’stoic’ and the sense of bewilderment a good asskickin’ can give you, you really dove deep into a great bit. Good job.

Honestly, I still don’t remember why it happened or what it was about. It was the end of 5th grade before moving away. It’s an odd little memory that’s plagued me for years.

All too familiar, as a child who often moved and as a teacher now.

Isn’t this what happens through pain and frustration when parting with friends..Ambivalence. Love you so much,hate it because you are leaving. Story stirred memories.