Mr. Quick, you’re the most productive writer I’ve seen on Ficly… I’m in awe.
Anyways, really liked this— good reflection of “legit” religions, actually. Being an ex-Christian, I remember the feelings you describe and the belief that you are “chosen” and “special”. I like the implication at the end (anointing them with his jizz… or am I the only one who’s thinking that?)
The only constructive criticism that I’d offer is that there might be a bit too much exposition (“telling” rather than “showing” the reader). But I realize it’s difficult not to do that in this medium (1024 character limit)…
Kay-Teaze