This piece can be considered a sequel to Not Moving – http://ficly.com/stories/636 – and is considered canon for the Moving On series.

A really moving, haunting piece.

I particularly like the way you have to piece together their lives from phrases which she uses that they would both understand – but which have deep meanings hidden behind them.

Stark. I love stark. It takes a few reads to work out what is happenning here: sometimes that would annoy me, but the nature of this piece calls for a good deal of data compression. You have managed it exquisitely.

The “don’t try to find me” jars somewhat, but I can’t place why and it is certainly appropriate for the piece.

Wow.

The ‘dont try to find me’ does seem just a little cliche to me, possibly the same for ethelthefrog? Maybe ending on ‘I wonder if you’ll notice Istopped visiting’ could have had more impact??

Just a small note on what is otherwise a very well written piece.

I wanted a better way to say it, but I was running out of characters.

I definitely wanted to get that feeling in, though.

And, yes, it’s a cliché… but, as I say quite a lot, they wouldn’t be clinches if they didn’t happen all the time. :-)

or even clichés! sigh

Amazing dkscully, and I agree with the above, there is a lot here! But I think the ’don’t try to find me’ adds more mystery and desperation.
Hope there isn’t a return address… lol