Great story, fantastic descriptions

As I said before, I don’t have a clue what’s going on here. I’m torn pn whether or not that’s actually a bad thing.

To be entirely honest, I don’t know either

I think when I started it, it was about a woman who fell from grace and was living on the streets for a while.

Then I dunno werewolves?!

I’ve never been a huge fan of exposition through dialog, especially when it’s spoken aloud by a solitary character. Something about it just seems a bit forced.

I think the last line is killer, though. And the mix of colors in the first lines paints a vivid picture.

The color thing is actually where a lot of this story came from.

One night my gums were bleeding, for whatever reason, and I noted the color after I brushed my teeth, and then it tuned into a mediocre story.

It sounds more like zombie madness setting in. Pretty well done.