Very disturbing scene. I don’t usually like the present tense for a narrative, but this works pretty well.
Since when is blood pink like strawberry milk? So, did Dana do it, or did she stumble upon it?
I reworked it. The milk is pink BECAUSE of the blood.
(What do you think? Do YOU think Dana did it? :)
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