Last sentence was awkward for me; had to read it twice. At least the woman was alive. But it seems the protagonist is not the hostage they want, and therefore in more danger.

The plot thickens! – Doc, you are awesome at ‘Tag(s) you’re it!’ Not only are you scoring ‘extra points’ you’re writing really good sequels. – Can’t wait to read what happens next. Sequel, anyone?

Interesting and intriguing, but the last sentence was a little awkward.