Well, that was dark and depressing. The beginning was a bit of a jumble with the bit about starting a story with he, but I kind of got the point. Just to be helpful, it’s consider less powerful to start sentences with conjunctions (but, and, or, etc.).

All that aside, you paint an effectively tragic picture.

An affective vignette with a fairly shocking ending. I read it several times and particularly like the penultimate sentence – I’d have probably ended it at that.

You. Who the hell starts a comment with “You”. – You certainly used ‘He’ to the full. He, he, he, he he… Then you switch to ‘His’ and BOOM it’s over! – He didn’t see what hit ‘him’.

Tragic ending. We almost cared for the guy, too. Such a loss.

I feel this is a drunk driving story. Once again, I can relate to this.

Had a friend who got a small lot willed to him from his father. It was a nice lot in a seaside town, Port Townsend, Washington. It was a couple hours drive from our part of the peninsula. He had already built a shed. I helped build a fence and run some underground water and electricity.

When the sun went down, he drank and drank and drank. And cry. And scream. And became very abusive. And drove drunk into town if he ran out of alcohol.

He’d had the property for 15 years and spent every weekend on it, getting drunk every time. All he had to show for it was a shed and a fence.

He’s not my friend anymore.